From One Single Impression: Prompt 75: Windows
I saw her through my car window this morning…
It was the black high heels that caught my eye, the toes peeping through like painted eggshells.
Frayed blonde hair blew across her face as she stretched to adjust a sign that said,
“Open House. Ocean View!”
If it wasn’t for the white Mercedes just a few feet away, she could have been any crazy person on the corner.
At first, I thought she was a crazy person… who would willingly stand in the dirt on a street corner under the freeway?
And then as the sun shifted, I saw the smart suit jacket. The falling facelift, the too tight skirt.
Was it Channel No. 5 I smelled as I passed by…
Or desperation?
The Little Writer That Could 
Very good – as someone said, the sparseness works well here. Desperation indeed.
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Yay! Thanks, Dianne! 🙂
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I’m appreciating your realtor. At least right now she is ‘making it.’
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She’s making it… but at what price?
That said… I kind of ike the fact that you’re rooting for her. Interesting perspective. Thanks, Jim.
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This makes me think of the realtor in the movie “American Beauty. ” Desperation I am sure, especially in these economic times!
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You totally got it … that realtor in “American Beauty” made a huge impact on me – and being a R.E. assistant p/t puts that whole profession into sharp clarity. I see these women frequently… No matter how many diamonds they were or fancy cars they drive, there is a feeling of emptiness that overlays everything. Now more than ever…
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I can’t tell you again how in awe I am with the sparseness of this story! (Have you read “Her Eyes” on my Blog? This is my attempt at sparseness.) There is something perect about a complete stroy that does not waste words just to add a frame it doesn’t need, and you succeed here brilliantly. (Just came back to admire it once again!) 🙂
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Bill, what a compliment! No, I haven’t read your piece, but will definitely do so… Will report back on your blog!
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This is great! I’ve seen this woman… LOL 😉
Loved where you took this prompt too.
Hugs, G
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wow, very nice…
maybe both the chanel 5 and the inner torment?
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I love this, I love this, and the picture so perfect! How many of these people I have met.
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I agree with Sandy…I detected a scent of desperation coming from the woman you wrote about in this piece.
You did paint a vivid photo with your words…I felt I was looking out a car window observing the woman.
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That was my goal… so glad the sentiment came through! Thanks for stopping by!
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A sign of the times. Short and perfectly written!
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Big thanks! Short and sweet is where I’m at, lol.
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“who would willingly stand in the dirt on a street corner under the freeway” nice juxtaposition with the white mercedes off the freeway. Seems to fall in line with my sentiments today. Love the ending April, kudos!
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Jaymie! Thank you – I wanted to make the ending strong if I could. Much to learn, but I”m getting there… 🙂
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I love the minimal story, in which there is nothing extra to fill in the space. This one rocks!
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Dude, thanks. I love little stories… so that’s probably more of what you’ll see here… really appreciate your feedback!
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I am always willing to share my opinion, a fact that has caused many a strained relationship in my “Real Life.” 🙂
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maybe the word “young” can be misunderstood….I meant the “fresh” way to say things that you use…:)
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Ah…. that’s very cool. Thank you!!
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http://wildgoosescoopsmoon.blogspot.com/
Thanks for letting me know. I tried from here and couldn’t find myself.
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oh…you are young!
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these are desperate times. your sad description paired with the anime image drives home the message.
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Thank you Gabrielle… very nice of you to comment! Sometimes photos really cinch the deal…
btw, I’m having trouble accessing your blog… can you give me the url?
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Perhaps that perfume is the scent of desperation. Poor woman.
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I was trying to bring out her inner angst… so glad it came through for you!
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wow…you changed the photo…both were good …
love your take on it..
cool one…
hugs,
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Thanks Shraddha! I was exercising and just thought the first one didn’t quite match. Glad to know it was ok, though. This actually did happen to me this morning… so interesting…
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